It's cool... I like the drum and bass patterns, it's just so... dissonant... Maybe try spending more than 1/2 an hour lmao
Edit: I don't think I can reply back... Sorry, I'm not sure what to say, and I'm not SUPER experienced (I have no idea what I'm doing, I just... do it. lmao) but I'll try to analyze it and give better feedback when I have time... For now... Try to work on your melodies I guess? (Also this could be a LOT louder without loosing quality)